Here's ours - as is pretty obvious, it was super informal and just us yacking at the camera. As noted in the (just updated) text there -- this is from 7 months ago, so doesn't correspond to our current plans in many ways, but gives you an idea for the sort of video that it was.
Hm. I don't know if that will help at all. I figure the best way to make those videos is to do what you yourself would do, and to be as natural as possible.
If you don't do that then all that will happen is that YC will receive a bunch of cookie-cutter videos, and that's exactly what you do not want.
You want your video to present you in a way that matches you, not to present you in a way that matched someone else.